03 The Trees in Riverdale Park- Karen Solie

If I’m being perfectly honest, the reason Karen Solie’s “The Trees in Riverdale Park” jumped out to me at first is because the title had “Riverdale” in it. But unlike the TV show Riverdale, this poem is actually well-written and has much for me to unpack.

To summarize, I felt like this poem was about how reaccessing a memory and recording it automatically distorts the authenticity of the event. Simply by writing down her observations of Riverdale Park, she has already altered the truth. There are many psychology studies asserting the fact that eyewitness accounts are not completely valid. Additionally, simply the way a question is phrased i.e “how fast was the car going when it bumped into the other car?” and “how fast was the car going when it smashed into the other car?” can drastically alter the eyewitness testimonies to a car accident. Naturally, through writing, and poetry writing in particular, specific words are chosen to elicit a feeling. Because of this, all poetry is not necessarily “accurate.”

I do not believe that a poem can be purely factual, but it can be true.

The first thing that strikes me about Solie’s poem is the use of scientific language. In the very first line, she uses the word “quadrisect.” Later on, the theoretical language continues: logic, theorem, hypotheses. This genre of words, especially combined with the specific lists of details Solie employs (as in the specific species of trees and secret bars), gives a sense of concreteness and a desire to turn her observations into fact. For the most part, the poem is objective and relies on visuals. It reminds me of chemistry lab in a way, where reactions and materials must be carefully observed and recorded. I would have loved to see this played up even more, maybe through use of texture or color or quantifying something in the scene.

Nevertheless, the attempt to stick to the facts goes astray. Solie’s romanticism manages to slip into the poem. Perhaps even corrupted in the very first stanza with the metaphor “square acre/ white as the page in February,” I don’t view this as a failure or even a tension in the poem. It goes back to what I was saying before: this is the poet speaking her truth. Though less factual, this intimacy to her thoughts and comparison give Riverdale Park a greater authenticity and history. Still, it’s worth noting that there are few adjectives and flower-y language in the poem. Rather, the distortion comes from Solie’s use of curious use of nouns that transform the tangibility of the park into some theoretical headspace.

The stanzas and line breaks have no discernible pattern. They tend to end on strong words and there is minimal enjambment. She chooses instead to break lines at the end of clauses or phrases, which plays into the logic of the language she uses. However, there is a stanza that stands out to me: I’ve never understood what “starlit” means.

This line stands out for several reasons. Firstly, it’s the only single-line stanza, so it feels like an interruption or an interjection. Secondly, this is the first and only instance of the first-person pronoun “I.” There are several instances of the word “us” used previously, but it seems defamiliarized, as if speaking to humanity or a larger collective group. The usage of the “us” is not as intimate or startling as the sudden appearance of the “I.” Thirdly, this line is an abrupt admission of doubt or skepticism towards what the poet knows. She seems so firm in her knowledge in the previous stanzas, but this is the line where the poem really turns. The stars are not strong enough to pierce the darkness, and her poems cannot really illuminate the truth, but there is still beauty in knowing that there is a world to describe and capture.

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Rules for a poem:

1) Use a mundane, everyday scene or landscape. Use as many visuals and specific names as possible.
2) Take a field of science or another academic field. Create a word bank of vocabulary from this field and try to use as many of those words as possible in a poem.
3) Use only concrete, tangible metaphors.
4) Reference self in the poem as little as possible or not at all.

02 Only Child- Adam Clay

This week I’m looking at Only Child by Adam Clay. I like getting these daily poetry emails, because there’s a nice variety of contemporary poems. It’s cool to be able to get a sliver of the poetry scene every day and familiarize myself with some of today’s poets. And of course, I never feel like I have enough poetry.

I’ve had a really good day today, and my brain is buzzing in that way where it feels inspired, even though I haven’t actually done any creative writing today. The possibility of creation is there, if that makes sense. Hopefully it will linger for a few days.

Once again, I’m going to start my analysis by looking at the form. This one is quite different from the short couplet format of last week’s analysis. Though the individual lines are clipped, the poem is without stanza breaks and it gives the poem an anxious, claustrophobic feel to it, a cycle of thoughts that cannot be broken out of. The individual sentences spill over for several lines, like the speaker’s thoughts cannot be curtailed.

This feeling of entrapment is emphasized in several ways. Firstly, the opening line “Breakfast rained on again” sets the tone of the poem. I mean, just imagine a soggy breakfast! Not only does it conjure a feeling of discomfort and grossness, a rained on breakfast would understandably ruin the speaker’s whole day.

Secondly, Clay makes use of juxtaposition, pairing up opposite words to demonstrate the speaker’s lack of control over the situation. Some examples are “dark of the day,” “humid February,” and “I am/ drawing a self-portrait/ and trying to remove the self.” I really like how these images clash, but in a way that my mind is still able to understand what Clay means. The mismatch is jarring, but not incomprehensible. It’s sort of a consciousness of the randomness and unpredictability of life that we’re all subject to.

There is also an instance of repetition that I really like “I had always/ imagined a different type/ of fatherhood before/ fatherhood found me.” Repetition always intrigues me, because it has the potential to morph the connotation of the word in a minimal way. In this case, perhaps Clay’s idealist version of fatherhood has not been fulfilled in reality, or that he finds it impossible to achieve the caliber of fatherhood that he desires.

Because Only Child hinges on the concept of fatherhood, I really appreciate Clay’s attention to adhere to a domestic and internal perspective. The first third of the poem focuses on light/ dark and the way it morphs in the daughter’s bedroom. The darkness again creates a sense of pressurized closeness, but also a lack of certainty, as the speaker is unable to see ahead of him: I’m still/ trying to see in the room/ that’s gone power out. The weeds in the yard also overwhelm the speaker, and the pressure and responsibilities of fatherhood crowd out the speaker’s sense of identity.

Yet, despite all of this uncertainty, the speaker remains hopeful. He notes that looking back feels like looking forward, and he registers his effect on the world around him. Towards the end of the poem, the sentences become less relentless. They are shorter and more peaceful, and create a sense of calm and light that is still able to stem out of his doubt and anxiety.

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Rules for a poem

1. Create the tone of the poem in the opening line of the poem with a strong, sensory image.
2. Play with opposites and juxtaposition, light/ dark, smooth/ rough, etc, and try to ground the poem with this central conflict.
3. Use repetition to reorient an idea or concept.
4. Vary sentence length and see what effect this has on the poem.

01 October

The leaves shiver slick
from their branches, anxious 

as an empty hand. I knew your ochre
silhouette like a loon knows south.

We talked in switchbacks. I trailmarked
our days, counted each gooseberried sunrise.

That old bridge, swaying
like autumn— I walked towards you

without knowing the river, breaking
hard for the cliff’s edge,

throwing itself into a veil
of flight.

Check out the poem that inspired this poem here and check out the rules that I made for the poem here.